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The given line graph depicts the unemployment rates for rural and urban areas in the year 2012.The given data is divided a quarterly basis.

The given line graph depicts the unemployment rates for rural and urban areas in the year 2012. The given data is divided a quarterly basis. 2xVYb
Firstly, for the rural areas it can been seen that unemployment rate had been decreasing for the first half of the year, and reached its minimum of around 4. 5 percent. For other half of the year the unemployment percentage increased a bit and then pleaeaued. Seconly, for the urban areas the unemployment increased till the first half of the year. Then for the next quarter it decreased and reached its minimum of 2 percent. But after that it gradually increased and almost surpassed the unployment percentage of the rural area.
Firstly
, for the rural areas it
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that unemployment rate had been decreasing for the
first
half of the year, and reached its minimum of around 4. 5 percent. For other half of the year the unemployment percentage increased a bit and then
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pleaeaued
.

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Seconly
, for the urban areas the unemployment increased till the
first
half of the year. Then for the
next
quarter it decreased and reached its minimum of 2 percent.
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But
after that it
gradually
increased and almost surpassed the
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unployment
percentage of the rural area.
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IELTS academic The given line graph depicts the unemployment rates for rural and urban areas in the year 2012. The given data is divided a quarterly basis.

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