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The bar chart delineates the figures for international tourists of three different Vietnamese destinations, namely Phu Quoc, Da Nang, Mui Ne over a period of four years between 2000 and 2006.

The bar chart delineates the figures for international tourists of three different Vietnamese destinations, namely Phu Quoc, Da Nang, Mui Ne over a period of four years between 2000 and 2006. J3g6D
The bar chart delineates the figures for international tourists of three different Vietnamese destinations, namely Phu Quoc, Da Nang, Mui Ne over a period of four years between 2000 and 2006. Overall, the proportion of oversea travellers in Mui Ne experienced an enormous growth over the period shown. While Da Nang showed a steady decline in its figures, the opposite trend can be seen when we look at Phu Quoc’s tourist numbers. As can be seen from the chart, in 2000 Da Nang accounted for the highest growth proportion with 900, 000, approximately doubling that of Phu Quoc and three times higher than that of Mui Ne. However, during the following years, this noted attaction witnessed a decrease in its growth rate, down to 650, 000 in 2002 and only 500, 000 in 2004, after which it fell sharply to finish the period with 250, 000 people in 2006. Meanwhile, over the period from 2000 to 2006, Mui Ne experienced a constant rise in its figures, with the number reaching the highest point of about 950, 000 in 2006. Regarding the other site, the number of tourists in Phu Quoc fluctuated between 550, 000 and 650, 000 during the period from 2000 to 2006. The figure climbed quickly and stood at 600, 000, then dropped slightly 550, 000 before reaching a peak of nearly 650, 000 in the last year.
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for international tourists of three
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different
Vietnamese destinations,
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Phu
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Quoc
,
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Da
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Nang
,
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Mui
Ne over a
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of four years between 2000 and 2006.

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travellers
in
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Mui
Ne experienced an enormous growth over the
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shown. While
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Da
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Nang
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showed
a steady decline in its
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figures
, the opposite trend can be
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when we look at
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Phu
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Quoc
’s tourist numbers.

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from the chart, in 2000
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Da
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Nang
accounted for the highest growth proportion with 900, 000, approximately doubling that of
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Phu
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Quoc
and three times higher than that of
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Mui
Ne.
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, during the following years, this noted
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witnessed a decrease in its growth rate, down to 650, 000 in 2002 and
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500, 000 in 2004, after which it fell
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to finish the
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with 250, 000
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people
in 2006. Meanwhile, over the
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from 2000 to 2006,
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Mui
Ne experienced a constant rise in its
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figures
, with the number reaching the highest point of about 950, 000 in 2006.

Regarding the other site, the number of tourists in
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Phu
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Quoc
fluctuated between 550, 000 and 650, 000 during the
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period
from 2000 to 2006. The
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climbed
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IELTS academic The bar chart delineates the figures for international tourists of three different Vietnamese destinations, namely Phu Quoc, Da Nang, Mui Ne over a period of four years between 2000 and 2006.

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