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The given line graph depicts the proportion of moviegoers in a certain country , grouped according to age .

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The given line graph depicts the proportion of moviegoers in a certain country, grouped according to age. Overall, age played a role in cinema attendances as younger which accounted for the largest rate throughout the period surveyed. Meanwhile, two middle-age groups had remarkably similar trends which reached their nairs and then recovered, before stability subsequently a steady decline at the end of the period. Nevertheless, the elderly age group remained by far the lowest rate. As can be seen, in terms of the youngest age group and the oldest group starting at exactly 90 percent and 40 percent, respectively in 1978. In the next two decades, the ratio of movie visitors in both groups hit a low prior to significant recovery to the original points, followed by remained unchanged. Until in the year 2003, the former experienced a constant fall to just over 80 percent in the percentage of young cinema attendances, but those also keep a greatest contribution in the toal. As for the latter, the figure for senior attendances, however, increased slightly from 40 percent to 50 percent in 2005.
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line graph depicts the proportion of moviegoers in a certain country, grouped according to age.

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, age played a role in cinema attendances as younger which accounted for the largest rate throughout the period surveyed. Meanwhile, two middle-age
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had
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similar trends which reached their
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and then recovered,
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a steady decline at the
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, the elderly age
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remained by far the lowest rate.

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, in terms of the youngest age
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and the oldest
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starting at exactly 90
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and 40
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,
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in 1978. In the
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two decades, the ratio of movie visitors in both
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hit a low prior to significant recovery to the original points, followed by remained unchanged. Until in the year 2003, the former experienced a constant fall to
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over 80
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in the percentage of young cinema attendances,
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. As for the latter, the figure for senior attendances,
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, increased
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in 2005.
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