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The bar graph provides information about the cost number of homes that construct in two cities between 2000 to 2009

The bar graph provides information about the cost number of homes that construct in two cities between 2000 to 2009 PLwNJ
Overall, Derby and Nottingham increased the number of homes through a period of time, whilst Nottingham had some fluctuations before reaching the top. In contrast, Derby increased significantly at the end of the year. period of time, whilst Nottingham had some fluctuations before reaching the top. In contrast, Derby increased significantly at the end of the year. There were eighty five thousand increased in 2002 in Derby whereas, it has been remained unchanged about hundred ten thousand for the last four years in 2003 to 2007 before jumped to three hundred fifty thousand to the highest peak in 2009. In entire year of Nottingham there were some fluctuation. It increased the fourthy nine thousand in 2000 to 2005 before it dramatically drop about one thousand to two thousand in 2006 and 2008 in 20087 it reaches one hundred eighty thousand. For the last year it reaches to rise in 2009 about constant two hundred fifty thousand.
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before
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increased
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jumped to three hundred fifty thousand to the highest peak in 2009.

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drop about one thousand to two thousand in 2006 and 2008 in 20087 it reaches one hundred eighty thousand. For the last year it reaches to rise in 2009 about constant two hundred fifty thousand.
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