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The given line graph compares the four age groups in terms of the proportion of people going to the cinema once a month or more in a certain European country over a 11-year period, starting from 2000.

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The given line graph compares the four age groups in terms of the proportion of people going to the cinema once a month or more in a certain European country over a 11-year period, starting from 2000. It is noticeable that the percentage of Europeans going to the cinema increased over the period shown. We can also see that the number of 15-to-24-year-old people watching movies at the cinema were the most popular between 2000 and 2011. Looking at the information in more detail, we can see that the percentage of people aged from 25 to 35 and over 35 who went to cinema were about 5% and 1% respectively, while those aged from 7 to 14 and from 15 to 24 were around 10% and 16% respectively in 2000. There was a tiny growth in the numbers of 7-14-year-old and 25+ people watching films at cinema, on the contrary, there was a significant upturn in those of the young generation aged 15 to 24 from 2000 to 2006. Between 2006 and 2010, the percentage of 15-to-24-year-old people fluctuated around the 45% mark and reached a peak of approximately 59%. A sharp rise was also seen in the number of population aged groups 7 to14 and 25 to 35. On the other hand, the proportion of 35+ people went up marginally.
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11-year period, starting from 2000.

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increased over the period shown. We can
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that the number of 15-to-24-year-
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watching movies at the
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were the most popular between 2000 and 2011.

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that the percentage of
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from 25 to 35 and over 35 who went to
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cinema
were about 5% and 1%
respectively
, while those
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from 7 to 14 and from 15 to 24 were around 10% and 16%
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and 25+
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,
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, there was a significant upturn in those of the young generation
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15 to 24 from 2000 to 2006.

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fluctuated around the 45% mark and reached a peak of approximately 59%. A sharp rise was
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in the number of population
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groups 7 to14 and 25 to 35.
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went up
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IELTS academic The given line graph compares the four age groups in terms of the proportion of people going to the cinema once a month or more in a certain European country over a 11-year period, starting from 2000.

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