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the given line and bar graphs describes the newly graduated students and selected five different jobs in 1992, 1997 and 2002.

the given line and bar graphs describes the newly graduated students and selected five different jobs in 1992, 1997 and 2002. LGB0K
The given linear and bar graph displays information about the lately graduated candidates as well as their professions during three distinct years in the United Kingdom. The given data is in the percentage and numbers. A quick look is enough to see that the maximum students graduated in the middle year and professional was top considered occupation by them. It is clearly seen that during 1992 just above 150, 000 aspirants cleared their graduation which was the least number of graduates among others. Moreover, after 1992 the number of undergraduates students stared rising gradually and arrived below 200, 00 after five years. Most of the students cleared graduation in 1997. However, afterwards the number of graduation candidates was declining slightly and remained 175, 000 approximately. In addition to this, professional was the most chosen job by candidates yet its percentage was falling year by year from 59% to 49% respectively. The percentage of students who went with managerial and administrative occupation also remained equivalent with minor decrement of 2% in the given period. Meanwhile, solely clerical and secretarial field showed increment. In 1992 just 10 % graduates went with this sector which raised by around 9% in 1997 and being constant for next five years. Sales and others were the least selected fields by graduates in comparison to others.
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linear and bar graph displays information about the lately graduated candidates
as well
as their professions during three distinct years in the United Kingdom. The
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given
data is in the percentage and numbers.

A quick look is
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enough
to
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see
that the maximum
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students
graduated in the middle
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year
and professional was top considered occupation by them.

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clearly
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seen
that during 1992
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just
above 150, 000 aspirants cleared their graduation which was the least number of graduates among others.
Moreover
, after 1992 the number of undergraduates
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students
stared rising
gradually
and arrived below 200, 00 after five years. Most of the
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students
cleared graduation in 1997.
However
, afterwards the number of graduation candidates was declining
slightly
and remained 175, 000 approximately.

In addition
to this, professional was the most chosen job by candidates
yet
its percentage was falling
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year
by
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year
from 59% to 49%
respectively
. The percentage of
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students
who
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went with
managerial and administrative occupation
also
remained equivalent with minor decrement of 2% in the
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given
period. Meanwhile,
solely
clerical and secretarial field
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showed
increment. In 1992
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just
10 % graduates
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went with
this sector which raised by around 9% in 1997 and being constant for
next
five years. Sales
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and others
were the least selected fields by graduates
in comparison
to others.

IELTS academic the given line and bar graphs describes the newly graduated students and selected five different jobs in 1992, 1997 and 2002.

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219 words
6.0
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