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THE GIVEN GRAPHS SHOWS THE SALES OF MUSIC IN DIFFERENT WAYS.

THE GIVEN GRAPHS SHOWS THE SALES OF MUSIC IN DIFFERENT WAYS. RVLBP
THE LINE GRAPH REPRESENT THE PERCENTAGE OF MUSIC SALES IN THREE WAYS( STREAMS, DOWNLOADS AND CDS DOWNLOADS). WHICH WERE CONSUMED IN 8 YEARS FROM 2011 TO 2018. UNITS ARE MEASURED IN PERCENTAGE. OVERALL, CDS PURCHASED AND DOWNLOAD DECLINED OVER THE GIVEN PERIOD WHILE, STREAMS RISE DRASTICALLY. AT START OF THE PERIOD, CDS PURCHASED IS MOST CONSUMED. WHICH WAS REPLACED BY DOWNLOADS IN 2014 AND FOLLOWING STREAMS BECAME MORE CHOSEN IN LAST YEAR. IN REGARDS TO THE PERCENTAGE OF CDS PURCHASED IS DOMINATING WITH AROUND 55% IN FIRST YEAR AND REMAINED SAME FROM 2015-2016 THEN IT START DECREASES DRAMATICALLY 5% IN 2018. SIMILARLY, DPOWNLOADS BEGIN AT 35% IN 2011 AND PEAKED IN 2015 WITH JUST ABOVE 40%. AFTER THAT DOWNLOADS FALLS TILL LAST YEAR AT 30%. ON THE OTHER HAND, STREAMS IS UNCOMMON IN 2011 AT ONLY 5% AND SHOWS DRASTIC INCREASE WITH HIGHEST AS 40% IN 2018.
THE LINE GRAPH REPRESENT THE PERCENTAGE OF MUSIC SALES IN THREE WAYS
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DOWNLOADS
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CDS
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DOWNLOADS)
. WHICH
WERE CONSUMED
IN 8 YEARS FROM 2011 TO 2018. UNITS
ARE MEASURED
IN PERCENTAGE.

OVERALL
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CDS
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PURCHASED
AND
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DOWNLOAD
DECLINED OVER THE
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GIVEN
PERIOD WHILE,
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STREAMS
RISE
DRASTICALLY
. AT
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START
OF THE PERIOD,
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CDS
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PURCHASED
IS MOST CONSUMED. WHICH
WAS REPLACED
BY
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DOWNLOADS
IN 2014 AND FOLLOWING
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STREAMS
BECAME MORE CHOSEN IN LAST YEAR.

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IN REGARDS TO
THE PERCENTAGE OF
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CDS
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PURCHASED
IS DOMINATING WITH AROUND 55% IN
FIRST
YEAR AND REMAINED SAME FROM 2015-2016 THEN IT
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START
DECREASES
DRAMATICALLY
5% IN 2018.
SIMILARLY
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DPOWNLOADS
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AT 35% IN 2011 AND PEAKED IN 2015 WITH
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ABOVE 40%. AFTER THAT
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DOWNLOADS
FALLS TILL LAST YEAR AT 30%.

ON THE OTHER HAND
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STREAMS
IS UNCOMMON IN 2011 AT
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ONLY
5% AND
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SHOWS
DRASTIC INCREASE WITH HIGHEST AS 40% IN 2018.
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IELTS academic THE GIVEN GRAPHS SHOWS THE SALES OF MUSIC IN DIFFERENT WAYS.

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