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THE GIVEN GRAPH SHOWS LIESURE ACTVITIES CONSMED BY BOYS AND GIRLS.

THE GIVEN GRAPH SHOWS LIESURE ACTVITIES CONSMED BY BOYS AND GIRLS. BgO3w
THE BAR GRAPH REPRESENTS THE FOUR TYPES LIESURE ACTIVITIES( SPORTS, COMPUTER GAMES, MUSIC AND SHOPPING) COSNUMED BY BOTH BOYS AND GIRLS. UNITS ARE MEASURED IN PERCENTAGE. OVERALL, CONSUMPTION OF MUSIC IS SIMILIAR WITH BOTH GENDERS. BOYS SPENT MOST OF LIESURE TIME SHOPPING WHERAS, GIRLS SPENT MAJORITY OF TIME IN MUSIC. FURTHERMORE, THE SIGNIFICANT DIFFERENCE IS IN SPORTS. IN TERMS OF SPORTS, THE PERCENTAGE OF BOYS IS TWICE AS COMPARED TO GIRLS RESPECTIVELY 12% AND 25%. COMPUTER GAMES HAS VERY LESS VARIATION WITH BOYS AT IS JUST ABOVE 15% AN GIRLS AT MERERLY LESS THAN 15%. AS FAR AS MUSIC IS CONCERNED, BOYS AND GIRLS BOTH HAS SIMILIAR PERCENTAGE AT AROUND 18% WHERAS, THE MAJOR DIFFERENCE IS IN SHOPPING WITH APPROXIMATELY 30%.
THE BAR GRAPH REPRESENTS THE FOUR TYPES
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LIESURE
ACTIVITIES
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(
SPORTS, COMPUTER GAMES,
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MUSIC
AND SHOPPING)
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COSNUMED
BY BOTH
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BOYS
AND
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GIRLS
. UNITS
ARE MEASURED
IN PERCENTAGE.

OVERALL
, CONSUMPTION OF
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MUSIC
IS
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SIMILIAR
WITH BOTH GENDERS.
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BOYS
SPENT MOST OF
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LIESURE
TIME SHOPPING
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WHERAS
,
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GIRLS
SPENT
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MAJORITY OF
TIME IN
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MUSIC
.
FURTHERMORE
, THE SIGNIFICANT DIFFERENCE IS IN SPORTS.

IN TERMS OF SPORTS, THE PERCENTAGE OF
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BOYS
IS TWICE AS COMPARED TO
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GIRLS
RESPECTIVELY
12% AND 25%. COMPUTER GAMES HAS
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VERY
LESS VARIATION WITH
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BOYS
AT IS
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JUST
ABOVE 15% AN
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GIRLS
AT
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MERERLY
LESS THAN 15%.

AS FAR AS
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MUSIC
IS CONCERNED
,
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BOYS
AND
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GIRLS
BOTH HAS
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SIMILIAR
PERCENTAGE AT AROUND 18%
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WHERAS
, THE MAJOR DIFFERENCE IS IN SHOPPING WITH APPROXIMATELY 30%.
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IELTS academic THE GIVEN GRAPH SHOWS LIESURE ACTVITIES CONSMED BY BOYS AND GIRLS.

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