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The given diagram illustrates the manufacturing of carbonated drinks.

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The given diagram illustrates the manufacturing of carbonated drinks. Overall, the process of producing carbonated drinks goes through five different stages, starting from water cleaning and ending at product packaging. Stage one, where overall water cleaning is done, consist of raw water been filtered which goes through water softener and is mixed with chemicals. Later the water is been pumped and heated in electric heaters which goes through a cooling pipe, afterwards been mixed with carbon dioxide gas at the second stage of heating, evaporation and carbonation. At stage three, known as mixing, carbonated water is send to a mixing tank where it is mixed with color, syrup and flavor, which is again filtered. At stage four, where filtering and filling is done, the carbonated drink is filled in bottles and cans. At last stage, which is know as packaging, the final product is packed in huge boxes and transported to supermarkets for selling to customers.
The
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given
diagram illustrates the manufacturing of
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carbonated
drinks.

Overall
, the process of producing
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carbonated
drinks goes through five
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different
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stages
, starting from
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water
cleaning and ending at product packaging.

Stage one, where
overall
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water
cleaning
is done
, consist of raw
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water
been filtered
which goes through
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water
softener and
is mixed
with chemicals. Later the
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water
is been
pumped and heated in electric heaters which goes through a cooling pipe, afterwards
been mixed
with carbon dioxide gas at the second
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stage
of heating, evaporation and carbonation.

At
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stage
three, known as mixing,
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carbonated
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water
is
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send
to a mixing tank where it
is mixed
with color, syrup and flavor, which is again filtered. At
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stage
four, where filtering and filling
is done
, the
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carbonated
drink
is filled
in bottles and cans.
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At
last
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stage
, which is know as packaging, the final product
is packed
in huge boxes and transported to supermarkets for selling to customers.
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IELTS academic The given diagram illustrates the manufacturing of carbonated drinks.

Academic
  American English
4 paragraphs
156 words
6.5
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 7.0
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Lexical Resource: 6.0
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Grammatical Range: 6.5
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