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The given diagram illustrates how a tourist resort can be developed and grew.

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The given diagram illustrates how a tourist resort can be developed and grew. Overall, the process consist of different stages of the development of a tourist resort. It beginning with new hotels and ending up with a number of money lost through leakage. As is presented in the diagram, new hotels are set up and created jobs directly for their operations. Besides, they also construct local businesses to providing demands such as supply services. As the diagrams suggest, worker with their expense in the local and investment of other companies, contribute to tax revenues increase which together with business in the area indirectly generate creates more jobs for the resort. The diagram reveals that taxes spent on improving infrastructure and quality of tourism services. When the area becomes well-know with tourists, more profitability and revenue is expected for reinvesting into building up new hotels. However, in reinvestment into expansion plans, some money is lost through leakage.
The
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given
diagram illustrates how a tourist resort can
be developed
and grew.

Overall
, the process consist of
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different
stages of the development of a tourist resort.
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It beginning
with new hotels and ending up with
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a number of money
lost through leakage.

As
is presented
in the diagram, new hotels
are set
up and created jobs

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directly
for their operations.
Besides
, they
also
construct local businesses to providing demands such as supply services. As the diagrams suggest, worker with their expense in the local and investment of other
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
companies
, contribute to tax revenues increase which together with business in the area
indirectly
generate creates more jobs for the resort.

The diagram reveals that taxes spent on improving infrastructure and quality of tourism services. When the area becomes well-know with tourists, more profitability and revenue is
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
expected
for reinvesting into building up new hotels.
However
, in reinvestment into expansion plans,
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
some
money
is lost
through leakage.
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IELTS academic The given diagram illustrates how a tourist resort can be developed and grew.

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156 words
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