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The Given Chart shows Unemployment rate in Australia in 2012 and the blue line indicates the Rural areas and red line describes Urban areas

The Given Chart shows Unemployment rate in Australia in 2012 and the blue line indicates the Rural areas and red line describes Urban areas qLyya
. Passage 1: In the chart it describes Four quarters of the year related to the areas of the unemployment. First when we observe the Rural areas, it started with 65% in the first quarter and it gradually dropped down to 45% to the second quarter. But there is a raise from second upto 55% of rate and form there it flucates to the fourth quarter of the year reaches to 50% of unemployement. Passage 2: When coming to the Urban areas, it started with 21% in the first quarter it roses to 40% of the rate to the second quarter. Initially, the percentage rate has been dropped down from 40% to 21% in the third quarter. From there the percentage rate has been increased upto 48% in the fourth quarter. Overview: Comparing the unemployment rate in Australia in 2012 of Urban and rural areas, there is a huge increase in the Urban areas unemployment rate to 28% and in rural areas it decreased to 15%.
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of the year related to the
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of the unemployment.
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unemployement
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Passage 2: When coming to the Urban
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it roses to 40% of the
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to the second
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has been
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dropped down
from 40% to 21% in the third
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48% in the fourth quarter.

Overview: Comparing the unemployment
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rate
in Australia in 2012 of Urban and rural
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, there is a huge increase in the Urban
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unemployment
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to 28% and in rural
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it decreased to 15%.
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IELTS academic The Given Chart shows Unemployment rate in Australia in 2012 and the blue line indicates the Rural areas and red line describes Urban areas

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