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The bar chart illustrates Australian people’s regular physical activities to certain age groups with both genders in 2010.

The bar chart illustrates Australian people’s regular physical activities to certain age groups with both genders in 2010. 26d6b
The bar chart illustrates Australian people’s regular physical activities to certain age groups with both genders in 2010. First of all, there are six different age groups which are include the age between 15-65 for each gender. The women’s physical activities peaked the enormous percentage at the ages of 15-24. At the middle age, the women have less body motion, also between the 35-45 ages, this ratio falls down to 39. 5 %. Between the 25-34 and the 45-54 percentages of physical activities in women's lives are nearly equal. The gender of men’s physical activities has completely different figures on the chart. Australian men's physical activity increased mostly in the middle ages, such as between the ages of 35-44 and 45-54 and 55-64, in addition to activities in these ranges are approximately equal. In the 65 and over age group men and women has the almost equivalent percentage of physical activities proportion with 46. 7 % and 47. 1% respectively. Overall, all of the physical activities can be changeable with the different percentage in all different people groups live in Australia.
The bar chart illustrates Australian
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with both genders in 2010.

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which are
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between 15-65 for each gender. The women’s
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peaked the enormous
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ages
of 15-24. At the middle
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, the women have less body motion,
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between the 35-45
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, this ratio falls down to 39. 5 %. Between the 25-34 and the 45-54
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of 35-44 and 45-54 and 55-64,
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in these ranges are approximately equal. In the 65 and over
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proportion with 46. 7 % and 47. 1%
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live
in Australia.
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