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The given chart present the annual spending changes by a particular Britain school from 1981 to 2001.

The given chart present the annual spending changes by a particular Britain school from 1981 to 2001. N3R9N

In 1981, the most annual spending on teacher’s salaries with 40%. After that, the figure increase moderately to 50% in 1991 before decreasing gently to 45% in 2001. Turning to expenditure on gurniture and equipment, it stood at 15% at the beginning of the period. However, this number underwent a substantial down-turn to 5% in 1991 followed by a sharp upturn to 23% at the end of the period. Among five methods, in the first year, the proportion of the money used for insurrance was the lowest with 2%. There was a slight rise in this number to 8% in the next 20 years. By contrast, the percentage of money spent on the other worker’s salaries was the second highest with 28% in 1981. However, it dropped wildly to 15% in 2001. Turning to resources e. g. books, as much annual spending on this number as on furniture and equipment with 15% each at the beginning of the period. Then, it risen slightly to 20% in 1991 before falling dramatically to 9% at the end of the period. Overall, despite some fluctuations, total school spending on teacher’s salaries, furniture and equipment, insurrance show a rising trend and that on other worker’s salaries and resources e. g. books show a falling trend over the given of period.

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salaries
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period
. However
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. Among five methods, in the first
 year, the proportion of the money This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :exploited
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 was the lowest with 2%. There was a slight rise in this number to 8% in the next
 20 years.

By contrast, the percentage of money spent on the other worker’s You use this word too often, consider replacing it withwagefeepaystipendearningsincome
salaries
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 books, as much annual spending on this number as on furniture and equipment with 15% each at the beginning of the You use this word too often, consider replacing it withtermspanstretchseasonagecourse
period
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risen
slightly
 to 20% in 1991 This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:previouslyprior to
before
 falling dramatically
 to 9% at the This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :expiration
end
 of the period.

Overall
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some
 fluctuations, total school spending on teacher’s You use this word too often, consider replacing it withwagefeepaystipendearningsincome
salaries
, furniture and equipment, Possible spelling mistake found.insurance
insurrance
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show
 a rising trend and that on other worker’s You use this word too often, consider replacing it withwagefeepaystipendearningsincome
salaries
 and resources There should be no space here: "e.g.".e.g.
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 books This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :demonstrateportrayindicatedisplay
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period
. 