Do you want to improve your writing? Try our new evaluation service and get detailed feedback.
Check Your Text it's free

The given chart illustrates contribution of the goods of Indian’s GDP in the period of time 1960 and 2000 In general, it can be seen the sector of the agriculture started very well, while in the next decades it appears decreased rapidly.

The given chart illustrates contribution of the goods of Indian’s GDP in the period of time 1960 and 2000 In general, it can be seen the sector of the agriculture started very well, while in the next decades it appears decreased rapidly. w9Wr
The given chart illustrates contribution of the goods of Indian’s GDP in the period of time 1960 and 2000 In general, it can be seen the sector of the agriculture started very well, while in the next decades it appears decreased rapidly. On the other hand, the services area wasn’t good from the very beginning, however it’s changed dramatically and the other area industry that increased in a static way. At the very beginning, in 1960 the agriculture area was leading the top position and the ratio looks like around 62, although in the next decades like 1970 to 2000 it decreased substantially. Where the services industry showed different statistics. In 1960 the services area percentage around little over 10, but in 1970 to 2000 it increased is a rapid way. In the final, the industry area nothing much changed in 1970 it’s changed approximately 15 to 20, though in 1980 to 2000 it’s static in a same position. So that the industry area was increased gradually.
The
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
given
chart illustrates contribution of the
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
goods
of Indian’s GDP in the period of time 1960 and 2000

In general
, it can be
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
seen
the sector of the agriculture
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
started
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
very
well, while in the
next
decades it appears decreased
rapidly
.
On the other hand
, the
Apostrophe might be missing. Did you mean "services'" or "service's"?
services
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
area
wasn’t
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
good
from the
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
very
beginning,
however
it’s
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
changed
dramatically
and the other
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
area
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
industry
that increased
Consider replacing "in a static way" with the adverb for "static"; e.g., "in a hasty manner" with "hastily".
in a static way
.

At the
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
very
beginning, in 1960 the agriculture
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
area
was leading the top position and the ratio looks like around 62, although in the
next
decades like 1970 to 2000 it decreased
substantially
.
“Where” at the beginning of a sentence usually requires a 2nd clause. Maybe a comma, question or exclamation mark is missing, or the sentence is incomplete and should be joined with the following sentence.
Where
the
Apostrophe might be missing. Did you mean "services'" or "service's"?
services
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
industry
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
showed
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
different
statistics. In 1960 the
Apostrophe might be missing. Did you mean "services'" or "service's"?
services
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
area
percentage around
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
little
over 10,
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
but
in 1970 to 2000 it increased is a rapid way.

In the final, the
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
industry
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
area
nothing much
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
changed
in 1970 it’s
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
changed
approximately 15 to 20, though in 1980 to 2000 it’s static in a same position.
“So that” at the beginning of a sentence requires a 2nd clause. Maybe a comma, question or exclamation mark is missing, or the sentence is incomplete and should be joined with the following sentence.
So that
the
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
industry
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
area
was increased
gradually
.

IELTS academic The given chart illustrates contribution of the goods of Indian’s GDP in the period of time 1960 and 2000 In general, it can be seen the sector of the agriculture started very well, while in the next decades it appears decreased rapidly.

Academic
  American English
3 paragraphs
167 words
6.0
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 7.0
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
  • ?
    One main idea per paragraph
  • ?
    Include an introduction and conclusion
  • ?
    Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • ?
    Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 5.0
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 6.5
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 5.0
  • Answer all parts of the question
  • ?
    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • ?
    Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
Labels Descriptions
  • ?
    Currently is not available
  • Meet the criteria
  • Doesn't meet the criteria
Recent posts





Get more results for topic:
  • The given chart illustrates contribution of the goods of Indian’s GDP in the period of time 1960 and 2000 In general, it can be seen the sector of the agriculture started very well, while in the next decades it appears decreased rapidly.