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The given chart describe the detail about the employment and unemployment in Philippines during the period of 50 years

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The assigned circular chart illustrate the detail about the society who are employed and unemployed in the Philippines during the period of five decades. At the fleeting glance it is immensely clear that, the biggest chunk is taken by the person's who was engaged in industry in 1932 whereas, the smallest chunk by the government laborer that was only 3%. In 1992, the main source of employment was service sector in which 52% of people was worked and after 5 period the percentage of workers in these field was decrease by 37% as well as at that time industrialization become main source of employment among trader. Moving to the further sector's, in agriculture and fishing sector 8 percent people was worked in the starting of the year the proportion of laborer was decreased in 1992 from 15 % to 8%. At the same time the proportion of unemployed individuals and the employee who work in industries were 25% and 50% respectively. Overall, it is elucidated that the largest proportion of people's was worked in industrialization in 1932 however, after 50 years most of people are engaged in service sector.
The assigned circular chart illustrate the detail about the society who
are employed
and unemployed in the Philippines during the period of five decades. At the fleeting glance it is
immensely
clear
that, the biggest chunk
is taken
by the person's who
was engaged
in industry in 1932 whereas, the smallest chunk by the
government
laborer that was
only
3%. In 1992, the main source of employment was service sector in which 52% of
people
was worked
and after 5 period the percentage of workers in these field was decrease by 37%
as well
as at that time industrialization become main source of employment among trader. Moving to the
further
sector's, in agriculture and fishing sector 8 percent
people
was worked
in the starting of the year the proportion of laborer
was decreased
in 1992 from 15 % to 8%. At the same time the proportion of unemployed individuals and the employee who work in industries were 25% and 50%
respectively
.
Overall
, it
is elucidated
that the largest proportion of
people
's
was worked
in industrialization in 1932
however
, after 50 years most of
people
are engaged
in service sector.
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IELTS academic The given chart describe the detail about the employment and unemployment in Philippines during the period of 50 years

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