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The given bar graph illustrates the percentage of total expenditure among different age group of residents in the UK in 2004

The given bar graph illustrates the percentage of total expenditure among different age group of residents in the UK in 2004 L96pp
The given bar graph illustrate the percentage of total expenditure among different age group of residents in the UK in 2004. Looking at the graph in more detail, age group of 61 to 75 are spending more in entertainment. Also, 76 + spending more in food and drinks these are about just under 20 % those are have high expenditure. Age group of 61 to 75 spent for restaurant and hotel is just under 5%. Also they spent 20 % for food and drinks. For food and drinks under 30 age group use 5 % and along with residents and hotel expenditure is slightly above than food and drinks. They spent just under 15 % for entertainment also. Age group of 31 to 45 and 46 to 60 they spent same for restaurant and hotel about 10 %. 31 to 45 age do people spent just under 15% for food and drinks and under 10 % for entertainment. 46 to 60 age group people spent over 15 % for food and drinks and just under 15 % for entertainment. Age group of 76+ spent above 10 % for the residents and hotel just above 5% for entertainment. Overlay, the usage of food and drinks, restaurant and hotel and entertainment are fluctuating between under 30 to 76+ age group.
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of residents in the UK in 2004. Looking at the graph in more detail,
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of 61 to 75 are spending more in entertainment.
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of 61 to 75
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of 31 to 45 and 46 to 60 they
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same for restaurant and
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about 10 %. 31 to 45
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above 5% for entertainment. Overlay, the usage of
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, restaurant and
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IELTS academic The given bar graph illustrates the percentage of total expenditure among different age group of residents in the UK in 2004

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