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The bar chart presents information about tourists of different art galleries in six countries. Overall, there is only a downward trend in graph. However, the difference between first three countries and other three counties is significant. The biggest figure is Louvre, while the lowest in State Hermitage. To compare with other countries, Louvre had its peak in 2011, which is approximately 8, 8 millions. USA and UK had the tiny distinction throughout the period. While Metropolitan Museum had exactly 6 millions, British Museum had around 5, 8 millions. The figure of visitors of museums in Korea, Spain and Russia is lower than in previous countries. It is nearly a third quarter in National Museum of Korea, while in Museo del Prada the amount is nearly a half of British Museum. The Russian museum State Hermitage was the least popular in 2011, which was just under 3 millions.
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had exactly 6 millions, British
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had around 5, 8 millions.

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in Korea, Spain and Russia is lower than in previous countries. It is
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of Korea, while in
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State Hermitage was the least popular in 2011, which was
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