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The given bar graph establishes a comparision between participation of people in varied sport activities in two different time frames ( 2017 and 2019

The given bar graph establishes a comparision between participation of people in varied sport activities in two different time frames ( 2017 and 2019 dpK1r
The given bar graph establishes a comparision between participation of people in varied sport activities in two different time frames ( 2017 and 2019 ) According to the graph, the number of maximum participants for their respective years was in Gentle Walking with 50000 and nearly 55000 each. In 1997 basketball is the least participated sport with 9000 members and nearly 16000 people were more involved in the year 2017. Similarly, Cricket is the least involved sports by adults in the year 2017 with a drop of 17000. Jogging and Gym are popular among both the years with fairly equal number in both the years between range 30000 to 40000. Moreover, sports like football and hiking are popularly involved approximately 10000 more members in year 2017 than in the year 1997. Overall, Gentle Walking is the popular sport in both the years along with basket ball and cricket being the least favourite.
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According to the graph, the number of maximum participants for their respective years was in Gentle Walking with 50000 and
nearly
55000 each. In 1997 basketball is the least participated
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with 9000 members and
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16000
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2017.
Similarly
, Cricket is the least involved
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sports
by adults in the
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2017 with a drop of 17000. Jogging and Gym are popular among both the years with
fairly
equal number in both the years between range 30000 to 40000.

Moreover
,
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sports
like football and hiking are
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involved approximately 10000 more members in
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2017 than in the
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1997.
Overall
, Gentle Walking is the popular
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sport
in both the years along with basket ball and cricket being the least
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IELTS academic The given bar graph establishes a comparision between participation of people in varied sport activities in two different time frames ( 2017 and 2019

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