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The graph below shows food consumption in Australia between 1950 and 2010

The graph below shows food consumption in Australia between 1950 and 2010 5k8dn
The poly-line graph gives information about how much food ( vegetables, fruit, meat, bread, and seafood) consumed by an australian person a year over the period of 60 years between 1950 and 2010 and is measured in kilograms. Overall, it can be seen that the figures for three types of food (vegetables, fruit and bread increased, while there was a considerable decrease in meat consuption and the pettern for seafood remained stable over the period as a whole. 1950 to 1970 witnessed a decline in the amount of vegetable and meat, reaching to 120 in vegetable and 100 in meat respectively, while there was a considerable rise in the bread consumption, hitting a high of 65 in 1970, though unlike the trends above the trends mentioned the figures for fruit and seafood consumed remained the same as at the beginning of the period, showing 80 for fruit and just under 20 for seafood between 1970 and 2010. Despite some fluctuations there was a dramatic climb in vegetables, peaking at 160, which was the highest of all and a significant rise in fruit, reaching to 140 as well as a slight growth to 60 in bread consumption. However, 1970 to 2010 saw a drop to 80 in meat and a tiny improvement to just over 20 in the amount of seafood consumed, which was the lowest of all over the span.
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for seafood remained stable
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