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The given bar chart illustrates the ten nations’ electrical usage and supply in 2014. It is clear to see that China and USA produced and consumed significantly more electricity than any other country. Interestingly, German was the only country in the top ten that consumed more electricity than it produced.

The given bar chart illustrates the ten nations’ electrical usage and supply in 2014. It is clear to see that China and USA produced and consumed significantly more electricity than any other country. Interestingly, German was the only country in the top ten that consumed more electricity than it produced. 8dPDx
The given bar chart illustrates the ten nations’ electrical usage and supply in 2014. It is clear to see that China and USA produced and consumed significantly more electricity than any other country. Interestingly, German was the only country in the top ten that consumed more electricity than it produced. In 2014 China was the world leader in electricity production and consumption, with over the 5000 billion kWh for each. Ranking next was the USA, its energy supply and usage were around 1000 billion kWh less than China, they were 4. 099 and 38. 66 billion kWh respectively. In third place was Russia, although it's power production and consumption was only around 1000 billion kWh. The lowest producer in the top 10 was South Korea with 485. 1 billion kWh, which was about half of fourth-place country Japan. India, Canada, France and Brazil, their outputs ranged from 530. 7 to 936. 2 billion kWh while usages ranged from 455. 8 to 856. 7 billion kWh. Finally in ninth-place Germany produced only 526. 6 billion kWh power, but it consumed 582. 5 billion kWh.
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IELTS academic The given bar chart illustrates the ten nations’ electrical usage and supply in 2014. It is clear to see that China and USA produced and consumed significantly more electricity than any other country. Interestingly, German was the only country in the top ten that consumed more electricity than it produced.

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