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The given bar chart illustrates the proportion of population in four nations from 1950 to 2000, and also indicates the projection for 2050.

The given bar chart illustrates the proportion of population in four nations from 1950 to 2000, and also indicates the projection for 2050. 1kXYG
The given bar chart illustrates the proportion of population in four nations from 1950 to 2000, and also indicates the projection for 2050. Overall, it is clear seen that china had the highest percentage of world population in 1950 and 2000. Whereas, the lowest percentage was observed in Japan in both years. Moving to detail, In 1950 China has little change in 2000 year for world population nearly 22 percent. China population was steady declined about 19 %. Moreover, USA was ten percent in 1950. The world population was remained static which was 7 % in 2000 and future projected by 2050. Probing to further, Japan showed a fall from 5 % im 1950 and 4% respectively by 2000. It is predicted that the percentage was plunge further to 3 % by 2050. While, in India the population was 15 percent in 1950 and going thr further period was significantly grown was 19 and 22 % respectively.
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was steady declined about 19 %.
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was remained
static which was 7 % in 2000 and future projected by 2050. Probing to
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, Japan
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1950 and 4%
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IELTS academic The given bar chart illustrates the proportion of population in four nations from 1950 to 2000, and also indicates the projection for 2050.

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