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The given bar chart illustrates the four different technologies that used for watching television by households in one US city between 2004 and 2014.

The given bar chart illustrates the four different technologies that used for watching television by households in one US city between 2004 and 2014. KMrR
The given bar chart illustrates the four different technologies that used for watching television by households in one US city between 2004 and 2014. It is explicitly observed that the usage of Internet has an upward trend and reaches to its peak. However, the utilization of broadcast has a downward trend and hits its lowest point. In 2004, most number of people (around 95, 000) used broadcast where minimal (around 5, 000) used Internet services. At the same time the cable services was used in 85, 000 households and from then it has increased to 110, 000 in 2008 and then fall to 70, 000 by the end of 2014. In contrast, there was a gradual increase in use of satellite technology. It has increased from 70000 to 110000. At last, by the end of 2014 with highest number 190, 000 households were using Internet technology where as only 10, 000 households were happy with Broadcast services.
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bar chart illustrates the four
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technologies that
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used
for watching television by
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households
in one US city between 2004 and 2014.

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observed that the usage of Internet has an upward trend and reaches to its peak.
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, the utilization of broadcast has a downward trend and hits its lowest point.

In 2004, most number of
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people
(around 95, 000)
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used
broadcast where minimal (around 5, 000)
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used
Internet services. At the same time the cable services was
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used
in 85, 000
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households
and from then it has increased to 110, 000 in 2008 and then fall to 70, 000 by the
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end
of 2014.
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, there was a gradual increase in
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use
of satellite technology. It has increased from 70000 to 110000.

At last, by the
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end
of 2014 with
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highest
number 190, 000
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households
were using Internet technology
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only
10, 000
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households
were happy with Broadcast services.

IELTS academic The given bar chart illustrates the four different technologies that used for watching television by households in one US city between 2004 and 2014.

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