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The given bar chart illustrates the factors why adults decide to study while the pie chart provides the opinions about costs for adults' education.

The given bar chart illustrates the factors why adults decide to study while the pie chart provides the opinions about costs for adults' education. j5Wgp
The given bar chart illustrates the factors why adults decide to study while the pie chart provides the opinions about costs for adults' education. As an overall trend, the interest in subject was the highest percentage between all seven reasons for education, whereas adults think the least price should be for taxpayers. Based on the bar chart, the interest in subject had the highest percent purpose for education, with two-fifths. In addition, the second-major reason, it was to gain qualifications at 38%, wherease to meet people and to be able to change job comprised of 9% and 12% respectively. 20% attributed for both two categories, which are enjoying learning and to improve prospects of promotion, but afterwards the rate for helpful for current job was at 22%. According to the pie chart, in the pie chart were three categories, and one of them was individuals which constituted the most significant amount, with 40%. Therefore, the trend for employers amounted to more than a third. Compared to these types, taxpayers were the least amount for courses' costs by a quarter.
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illustrates the factors why adults decide to study while the pie
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provides the opinions about costs for adults' education.

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overall
trend, the interest in subject was the highest percentage between all seven reasons for education, whereas adults
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the least price should be for taxpayers.

Based on the bar
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, the interest in subject had the highest percent purpose for education, with two-fifths.
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, the second-major reason, it was to gain qualifications at 38%,
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job comprised of 9% and 12%
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prospects of promotion,
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afterwards the rate for helpful for
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job was at 22%.

According to the pie
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, in the pie
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were three categories, and one of them was individuals which constituted the most significant amount, with 40%.
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, the trend for employers amounted to more than a third. Compared to these types, taxpayers were the least amount for courses' costs by a quarter.
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