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The given bar chart describes the ratio of Canadian citizens who get stress in 4 various age categories for vital reasons

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The given bar chart describes the ratio of Canadian citizens who get stress in 4 various age categories for vital reasons. Looking at the chart, it is clear those individuals elderly 65-74 and 75 and over cope with stress due to their health problems and no particular reason. Meanwhile, lacking money and overwork are the vital causes of mental pressure among those who are 25-54 years aged. The percentage of people who aged 75+ and 65-74 are suffering stress in light of the fact that of no particular reason makeup 35% and 32% respectively, that is nearly double the proportion of those who are 55-64 and 5 times higher than the figure of people aged 25-54. The proportion of 75+ and 65-74 — year-aged people facing their health issues is higher than people in two younger age groups with 18%, 15%, 10%, 4% respectively. However, it is immediately obvious that the number of Canadian residents who are 25-64 stressed due to the fact of overwork take up the highest percentage, at 25%, which are 10% higher than those in the 55-64 age group. In the age group 65-74 and 75+, the proportions are 3% and 1%. People aged 25-54 are also worried about money the most, with 15%, 2% higher than 55-64 age group, double 65-74 group, and 5 times as much as the figure of 75+ age group.
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bar chart
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describes
the ratio of Canadian citizens
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who
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get
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stress
in 4 various
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age
categories for vital reasons.

Looking at the chart, it is
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clear
those individuals elderly 65-74 and 75 and over cope with
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stress
due to their health problems and no particular reason. Meanwhile, lacking money and overwork are the vital causes of mental pressure among those
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who
are 25-54 years aged.

The percentage of
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people
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who
aged 75+ and 65-74 are suffering
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stress
in light of the fact that of no particular reason makeup 35% and 32%
respectively
,
that is
nearly
double the proportion of those
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who
are 55-64 and 5 times higher than the figure of
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people
aged 25-54. The proportion of 75+ and 65-74 — year-aged
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people
facing their health issues is higher than
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people
in two younger
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age
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groups
with 18%, 15%, 10%, 4%
respectively
.

However
, it is immediately obvious that the number of Canadian residents
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who
are 25-64
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stressed
due to the fact of overwork take up the highest percentage, at 25%, which are 10% higher than those in the 55-64
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age
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group
. In the
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age
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group
65-74 and 75+, the proportions are 3% and 1%.
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People
aged 25-54 are
also
worried about money the most, with 15%, 2% higher than 55-64
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age
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group
, double 65-74
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group
, and 5 times as much as the figure of 75+
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age
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group
.
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IELTS academic The given bar chart describes the ratio of Canadian citizens who get stress in 4 various age categories for vital reasons

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