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The given bar chart compares the number of the passenger kilometres commuted in five different types of transports in the UK between 1990 and 2000.

The given bar chart compares the number of the passenger kilometres commuted in five different types of transports in the UK between 1990 and 2000. yL2Rg
The given bar chart compares the number of the passenger kilometres commuted in five different types of transports in the UK between 1990 and 2000. It is noticeable that the citizens using bus and rail were more popular than three out of five transports over the period shown. In addition to this, the exception of bicycle and motorbike, travelling by other vehicles totally increased from 1990 to 2000. Looking at information in more detail, we can see that the total passenger kilometres were around 100 billion kilometres in 1990 and climbed to over 110 billion kilometres in 2000. Specifically, travelling by bus and train were about 45 billion and 40 billion kilometres respectively in the year 1990, and there was a moderate rise of 50 billion kilometres in the year 2000. By contrast, distance covered by transportation, namely bicycle, motorcycle and airplane were tiny, with only under 10 million kilometres in 1990. Over 10 years, while that by airplane climbed marginally, the passenger kilometres commuted by bike and motorcycle decreased slightly.
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bar chart compares the number of the passenger
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kilometres
commuted in five
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different
types of transports in the UK between 1990 and 2000.

It is noticeable that the citizens using bus and rail were more popular than three out of five transports over the period shown.
In addition
to this, the
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exception of
bicycle and motorbike, travelling by other vehicles
totally
increased from 1990 to 2000.

Looking at information in more detail, we can
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see
that the total passenger
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kilometres
were around 100
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billion
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kilometres
in 1990 and climbed to over 110
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billion
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kilometres
in 2000.
Specifically
, travelling by bus and train were about 45
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billion
and 40
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billion
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kilometres
respectively
in the year 1990, and there was a moderate rise of 50
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billion
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kilometres
in the year 2000.

By contrast, distance covered by transportation,
namely
bicycle, motorcycle and airplane were tiny, with
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only
under 10 million
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kilometres
in 1990. Over 10 years, while that by airplane climbed
marginally
, the passenger
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kilometres
commuted by bike and motorcycle decreased
slightly
.
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IELTS academic The given bar chart compares the number of the passenger kilometres commuted in five different types of transports in the UK between 1990 and 2000.

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