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The following table graph represents the information about sales of drinks in small café for four months (January-April).

The following table graph represents the information about sales of drinks in small café for four months (January-April). jRDmd
The following table graph represents the information about sales of drinks in small café for four months (January-April). Overall, what stands out from this given graph is that there were the highest indexes in tea and coffee sales during the first three months of year 250, 270, 220 respectively, but from the April this data fell at 180. It is interesting to note that the followers of cocktails were the lowest index in following period and fluctuated around 90-110. Another striking trend is that the data of juice lovers were two times higher than cocktails’, and fluctuated between 200, 190, 210 respectively. Finally, the index of ice drinks was 150 in the beginning of given period, namely January as well as February. Nevertheless, in following two months there was rapid growth and reach the point at 190 in March and 230 in April. Overall, after analyzing the given table graph in can be clearly seen that, Juices and Cocktails are not effected by seasonal demand. Meanwhile the Hot drinks and Ice drinks are always effected by seasonal demand.
The following table graph represents the information about sales of
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café for four months (January-April).

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, what stands out from this
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from the April this data fell at 180. It is interesting to note that the followers of cocktails were the lowest index in following period and fluctuated around 90-110.

Another striking trend is that the data of juice lovers were two times higher than cocktails’, and fluctuated between 200, 190, 210
respectively
.

Finally
, the index of ice
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drinks
was 150 in the beginning of
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, in following two months there was rapid growth and reach the point at 190 in March and 230 in April.

Overall
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that, Juices and Cocktails are not effected by seasonal demand.
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are always effected by seasonal demand.
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IELTS academic The following table graph represents the information about sales of drinks in small café for four months (January-April).

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