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the following show the main sources of rubbish collected during a public cleanup day in one city and the main sources of rubbish collected from three locations within that city

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The given pie chart illustrates the information about the sources of rubbish that was collected in city on the public cleanup day and the table chart gives detail about three places of city from where garbage was collected. Overall, it can be seen clearly that large proportion of rubbish contained cigarette butts, while drinking straws found in small amount. Diego beach was the main source of waste in one city. Going into for the details, 40% of rubbish contained cigarette butts which was the highest percentage than others. Plastic bottles in the wastage was accounted for nearly a quarter. Glass and other products were found almost in same proportion which was approximately 10 for each. 12% aluminium cans were recorded in the rubbish. However, there was a minor share of drinking straws in the wastage was which was 8% only. Moving further, Arden park was the place where 66 kg garbage was collected which consists of 33 kg of glass, 24 kg aluminium cans and only 9 kg of cigarette butts. Large amount of rubbish was collected from diego beach as compared to others. It contained tyres, cigarette butts and plastic bottles in 563 KG, 161 kg and 60 kg respectively. In memorial park, 214 kg of cigarette butts, 108 kg of plastic bottles and 66 kg of aluminium cans were found. Togetherly, 378 kg rubbish was collected from that location.
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in city on the public cleanup day and the table chart gives detail about three places of city from where garbage
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.

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, it
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cigarette
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, while drinking straws found in
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amount. Diego beach was the main source of waste in one city.

Going into for the
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, 40% of
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rubbish
contained
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cigarette
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butts
which was the highest percentage than others. Plastic bottles in the wastage
was accounted
for
nearly
a quarter. Glass and other products
were found
almost in same proportion which was approximately 10 for each. 12%
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aluminium
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cans
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rubbish
.
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, there was a minor share of drinking straws in the wastage was which was 8%
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further
, Arden park was the place where 66 kg garbage
was collected
which consists of 33 kg of glass, 24 kg
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9 kg of
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. Large amount of
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rubbish
was collected
from
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beach as compared to others. It contained
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,
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and plastic bottles in 563 KG, 161 kg and 60 kg
respectively
. In memorial park, 214 kg of
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butts
, 108 kg of plastic bottles and 66 kg of
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IELTS academic the following show the main sources of rubbish collected during a public cleanup day in one city and the main sources of rubbish collected from three locations within that city

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6.0
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Coherence and Cohesion: 7.0
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