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The following pie chart show the use of social media by men and women in Australia in 2011 and 2014

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As is presented in the pie graph, in 2011, a quarter of males and above then females used social media everyday. The highest proportion of women used social media once in a week as compared to the men, which accounted to be 39% and 12% respectively. Also, both genders used the social media few time a week by below a quarter. 44% of males and 8% of females never used social media. Further, in 2014, the proportion of both genders was gradual increase by 20% usage of social media daily. By contrast, once a week and few a time percentile of men and women dramatic drop. The ratio of males who never used the social media was 30%. On the other hand, percentile of women rose rapidly by 22%Overall, the highest proportion of females used the social media rather than males. While, the maximum ratio was increase in everyday user over the given time period.
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