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The following maps illustrate an island before and after the build of some tourist facilities

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The following maps illustrate an island before and after the build of some tourist facilities. Overall, comparing the two maps the plane surface saw a remarkable development after the open of foreign services whereas trees and sea remain unchanged. Looking into detail, before the construction of facilities in the beach, we can see only a few numbers of trees and a beach and island was surrounded by sea. After the building of facilities for tourists, significant modifications can be seen in the bottom of the island where free land introduced the restaurant and reception which were linked by a vehicle track. Similarly, accommodations were built beside the reception and linked by footpath. swimming facilities have been added in the beach and beach was linked with some houses by footpath. Similarly, fishing has been built in front of the reception after the construction. On the other hand, we can’t see any changes in trees and the sea.
The following maps illustrate an island
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before
and after the build of
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some
tourist facilities.

Overall
, comparing the two maps the
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plane
surface
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a remarkable development after the open of foreign services whereas trees and sea remain unchanged.

Looking into detail,
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before
the construction of facilities in the
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beach
, we can
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see
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only
a few numbers of trees and a
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beach
and island
was surrounded
by sea.

After the building of facilities for tourists, significant modifications can be
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seen
in the bottom of the island where free land introduced the restaurant and reception which
were linked
by a vehicle
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track
.
Similarly
, accommodations
were built
beside the reception and linked by footpath.
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swimming
facilities have been
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added
in the
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beach
and
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beach
was linked
with
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some
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houses
by footpath.
Similarly
, fishing has
been built
in front of the reception after the construction.
On the other hand
, we can’t
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see
any
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in trees and the sea.

IELTS academic The following maps illustrate an island before and after the build of some tourist facilities

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