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The following bar graph illustrates us about the age profile of male and female cinema goer's in tear 2012 following paragraphs has summerised information of gin topic.

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The following bar graph illustrates us about the age profile of male and female cinema goer's in tear 2012 following paragraphs has summerised information of gin topic. To begin with, age group of children aged between 14-17 years are least interested in watching cinema both male and female shares common 7%. On the other hand teenagers aged between 18-24 years shows moderate interest by both genders 15%-16% respectively. Age group between 25-34 years adults and 35-49 years people has slight difference while female stands between 20-25% while male stands between 23%-25%. At last age group of 50 years and plus has major difference in both the genders male and female while male stands at 29% and females stands at 33%. To encapsulate, as we can see in the given bar graph intrest of watching cinema groups from childhood in both both genders. While after 50 years of age women still loves to go cinema than compared to male.
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goer's in tear 2012 following paragraphs has
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both male and
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shares common 7%.
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of 50 years and plus has major difference in both the genders male and
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while male
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IELTS academic The following bar graph illustrates us about the age profile of male and female cinema goer's in tear 2012 following paragraphs has summerised information of gin topic.

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