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The flowchart below compare three methods to recruit new employees.

The flowchart below compare three methods to recruit new employees. 96Xmw
The process chart compare the three ways of hiring new employees To begin with, the first way give advertisement within the company and prepare a shortlist to selected candidates then thay take interview and give job offer. The second ways also give advertisement but in the press then they make a shortlist of selected candidates. After that selected candidates first take interview and then exam. Passing candidates are selected to the job offer. Last method of external recruitment agency, it give advertisement in agency and company. After the advertisement make shortlist who presented to employer. Employer give interview as well as behalf of the interview they get a job offer. In conclusion, advertisement use in the all method but after that they have different steps to provide job.
The process chart compare the three ways of hiring new employees

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IELTS academic The flowchart below compare three methods to recruit new employees.

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128 words
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