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The flow chart demonstrates the honey making procedure. Overall, the process involves seven steps which can be grouped into three main stages: building a hive, searching and extracting nectar, and packing it into a honeycomb where it is dehydrated and formed.

The flow chart demonstrates the honey making procedure. Overall, the process involves seven steps which can be grouped into three main stages: building a hive, searching and extracting nectar, and packing it into a honeycomb where it is dehydrated and formed. pek69
The flow chart demonstrates the honey making procedure. Overall, the process involves seven steps which can be grouped into three main stages: building a hive, searching and extracting nectar, and packing it into a honeycomb where it is dehydrated and formed. Firstly, a hive that consists of numerous individual cells is built. Bees then leave the hive in order to search for nectar. Ones they have founded it and landed on the flower, the feeding begins. Having accumulated enough of nectar bees return to the hive where honey is going to be stored. Folioing this, the production process begins. The brought nectar is swiftly deposited into myriad cells. In terms of cooling down the nectar a bee fans it with its wings. Subsequently, water starts evaporates from the honey. Finally when all the water gets removed, honey is formed.
The flow chart demonstrates the honey making procedure.
Overall
, the process involves seven steps which can
be grouped
into three main stages: building a hive, searching and extracting
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
nectar
, and packing it into a honeycomb where it
is dehydrated
and formed.

Firstly
, a hive that consists of numerous individual cells
is built
. Bees then
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
leave
the hive in order to search for
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
nectar
. Ones they have founded it and landed on the flower, the feeding
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
begins
. Having accumulated
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
enough
of
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
nectar
bees return to the hive where honey is going to
be stored
.

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Folioing
this, the production process
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
begins
. The brought
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
nectar
is
swiftly
deposited into myriad cells. In terms of cooling down the
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
nectar
a bee fans it with its wings.
Subsequently
, water
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
starts
evaporates from the honey.
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Finally
when all the water
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
gets
removed, honey
is formed
.

IELTS academic The flow chart demonstrates the honey making procedure. Overall, the process involves seven steps which can be grouped into three main stages: building a hive, searching and extracting nectar, and packing it into a honeycomb where it is dehydrated and formed.

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