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The first graph shows that there is a considerable fall in purpose for learning with the non-identical age bracket.

The first graph shows that there is a considerable fall in purpose for learning with the non-identical age bracket. Almost 80% of students who are under 26years, with occupational reasons. And this range decrease for every next decade by 10-20%. In late adulthood (over 49years), it hits a low rate at 18%. In addition, there is a vast growth in the ratio of students with the major reason for education is for interest, especially in age over 49years which is at 70%. Students who are under 26yrs have 10% occasion of learning with interest. Also, around 40% of fresher between 40-49yrs whose prime reason for the study is not only for career and job posting but also for interest and curiosity. In the second graph, the highest support from the employer is given to the students who are under age 26yrs which is around 65%. In the cohort between 30-39yrs has fewer prop up from employer with the benefit of time off and help regarding fees to students. This rate is gradually fluctuating in the next four-generation which reaches nearly 44% in late adulthood (over 49yrs).
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that there is a considerable fall in purpose for learning with the non-identical age bracket. Almost 80% of
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students
who are under 26years, with occupational reasons. And this range decrease for every
next
decade by 10-20%. In late adulthood (over 49years), it hits a low rate at 18%.

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with the major reason for education is for interest,
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who are under 26yrs have 10% occasion of learning with interest.
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for career and job posting
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