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The first diagram gives a clear picture about a wave energy machine, which are the various parts involved in its functioning and also regarding its working pattern.

The first diagram gives a clear picture about a wave energy machine, which are the various parts involved in its functioning and also regarding its working pattern. r7yl
The first diagram gives a clear picture about a wave energy machine, which are the various parts involved in its functioning and also regarding its working pattern. The second diagram gives a clear picture about the location options with regard to installation costs. The wave energy machine functions mainly based on the wave direction. It has got various parts like electricity generator, various turbines and chambers. Water level and air flow are very important factors in this device. Air flow is happening through the chambers. Its functioning is based on a very simple technique of air pressure which produces energy. When we compare the installation costs big energy-machines have high installation cost whereas small ones have low installation costs. Efficiency will be more for the huge ones as they give out more energy while the minor ones will produce low energy. However thanks to the people who used their brain and energy to conserve our energy in a very fruitful and effective manner.
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diagram gives a
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picture about a wave
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machine, which are the various parts involved in its functioning and
also
regarding its working pattern. The second diagram gives a
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picture about the location options with regard to installation
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The
wave
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machine functions
mainly
based on the wave direction. It has
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got
various parts like electricity generator, various turbines and chambers. Water level and air flow are
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very
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important
factors in this device. Air flow is happening through the chambers. Its functioning
is based
on a
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very
simple technique of air pressure which produces energy.

When we compare the installation
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costs
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big
energy-machines have high installation
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cost
whereas
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small
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ones
have low installation
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costs
. Efficiency will be more for the huge
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ones
as they give out more
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energy
while the minor
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ones
will produce low
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energy
.
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However
thanks to the
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people
who
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used
their brain and
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energy
to conserve our
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energy
in a
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very
fruitful and effective manner.
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IELTS academic The first diagram gives a clear picture about a wave energy machine, which are the various parts involved in its functioning and also regarding its working pattern.

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  American English
2 paragraphs
163 words
6.0
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 5.5
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