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The first chart shows how energy is used in an average Australian household. The second chart shows the greenhouse gas emissions which result from this energy use. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.

The pie chart shows energy use and greenhouse gas emissions as a result. The first chart depicts Australian household energy use and second chart shows Australian household greenhouse gas emissions. Overall, it can be observed heating and water heating are largest contributors in chart number one and two respectively. In detail, heating contributed 42% of the total energy usage while water heating leads to 30% of usage. Moreover refrigerator, cooling and lighting collectively contributed 14%. Inputs by other appliances are 15%. Further, on detail observation of greenhouse gas emissions, we can predict that water heating is sole contributor giving inputs above 30% i. e. , 32% followed by other appliances, heating and refrigeration at 28%, 15% and 14% respectively. Finally, least contributors for greenhouse emissions are lighting and cooling leading to a total of 11%.
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contributed 42% of the total energy usage while water
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, we can predict that water
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is sole contributor giving inputs above 30%
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are lighting and cooling leading to a total of 11%.
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IELTS academic The first chart shows how energy is used in an average Australian household. The second chart shows the greenhouse gas emissions which result from this energy use.

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