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The first chart below shows the percentages of women and men in a country involved in some kinds of home tasks (cooking, cleaning, pet caring and repairing the house. The second chart shows the amount of time each gender spent on each task per day.

The first chart below shows the percentages of women and men in a country involved in some kinds of home tasks (cooking, cleaning, pet caring and repairing the house. The second chart shows the amount of time each gender spent on each task per day. Jo6Nw
The first chart illustrates how many males and females are involved in doing various household chores, while the second chart represents how much time is spent on each task by both genders. Overall, it can be seen that women do more housework than men with the exception of house repairs. Also, cooking and cleaning demand more time of both genders. With regards to housework, majority of females(80%) do cooking as opposed to 60% for males. Similarly, the percentage of women doing cleaning is higher than males, around 61% and 40% respectively. The figures for pet care are quite identical for both genders at 20%. Interestingly, 20% of male do house repairs whereas merely 2% of females do this task. Turning to time spend on housework, women spend more than 80% minutes and 60% on cookinh and cleaning, which is around 20 minutes higher than males. Both males and females spend approximately 20 minutes on pet care. The amount of time spend by males on house repairs accounts for 20 minutes. On the other hand, women spend only about 5 minutes on doing house reapairs.
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is spent
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women
do more housework than
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men
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repairs.
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, cooking and cleaning demand more
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time
of both genders.
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majority of
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females(80%)
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do cooking
as opposed to 60% for
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males
.
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women
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males
, around 61% and 40%
respectively
. The figures for pet care are quite identical for both genders at 20%.
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, 20% of male do
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repairs whereas
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do this task. Turning to
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on housework,
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more than 80% minutes and 60% on
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and cleaning, which is around 20 minutes higher than
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females
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approximately 20 minutes on pet care. The amount of
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by
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repairs accounts for 20 minutes.
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IELTS academic The first chart below shows the percentages of women and men in a country involved in some kinds of home tasks (cooking, cleaning, pet caring and repairing the house. The second chart shows the amount of time each gender spent on each task per day.

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