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The first chart below shows how energy is used in an average Australian household. The second chart shows the greenhouse gas emissions which result from this energy use. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The first chart below shows how energy is used in an average Australian household. The second chart shows the greenhouse gas emissions which result from this energy use. 6OWB
The first chart illustrates the energy consumption of Australian household in average, while the second gives information on the greenhouse gas emissions which are observed from this energy usage. Overall, household energy mainly goes to heating while the largest amount of greenhouse gas emission comes from water heating. First of all, the method of heating is the most extensively applied one among others, with 42% of total use, with the relatively low emission of greenhouse gas, producing only 15% of greenhouse gas emission. Water heating, on the other hand, has the highest amount of emission (32%) compared to other modes of energy yet its energy consumption is substantially equal to its emission (30%). In addition, the use of other applicants are accounted as 15% of total energy employment yet producing 28% of overall emission. Similarly, refrigerators reproduce 14% of greenhouse gas while it consumes 7% of total energy. The lighting only applies for 4% of energy use while its rate of generation of greenhouse gas is doubled for 8%.
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mainly
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, the method of heating is the most
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applied one among others, with 42% of total
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, with the
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greenhouse
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, producing
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15% of
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. Water heating, on the
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hand, has the highest amount of
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(32%) compared to
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modes of
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consumption is
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employment
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producing 28% of
overall
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.
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, refrigerators reproduce 14% of
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greenhouse
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gas
while it consumes 7% of total
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energy
. The lighting
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applies for 4% of
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while its rate of generation of
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is doubled
for 8%.
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IELTS academic The first chart below shows how energy is used in an average Australian household. The second chart shows the greenhouse gas emissions which result from this energy use.

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6.0
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