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The first chart below shows how energy is used in an average Australian household. The second chart shows the greenhouse gas emissions which result from this energy use.

The first chart below shows how energy is used in an average Australian household. The second chart shows the greenhouse gas emissions which result from this energy use. 0Nr3
The pie charts illustrate the percentage of energy used in six different categories in Australia and how much greenhouse gas emissions from this energy used. Overall, in both charts, Whereas the cooling occupied least percentage of area, heating covered the highest part of the pie. In addition, the percentage of gas emission was higher than that energy used. As regarding consumption of energy, 42% of energy used by heating that followed by water heating, which was 30%. The third significant percentage of energy consumed by other appliances (15%). Furthermore, cooling, lighting and refrigeration covered the smallest area (2%, 4% and 7%, respectively). In the second chart, refrigeration and heating, both emit the same percentage of gas (almost 15%), while the highest gas was emitted by water heating (32%) and other appliances (28%). Moreover, cooling and lighting emit the noticeable gas to the atmosphere, which was 3% and 8% respectively.
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consumed by other appliances (15%).
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to the atmosphere, which was 3% and 8%
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IELTS academic The first chart below shows how energy is used in an average Australian household. The second chart shows the greenhouse gas emissions which result from this energy use.

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