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The figure illustrates the process of making dairy products

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The figure illustrates the process of making dairy products which includes workers and various producing lines with machines. The initial impression from the graph is that all dairy products are made in the same factory and, the whole production from milking cows to being ready for selling in supermarkets; happens in less than 24 hours. The first step is that the cows are not ready for the milking stage unless they are grazed well; After milking cows by machines twice a day, the machines have transferred the milk to the refrigeration storage. Then, a milk tanker comes for delivering the milk to the dairy factory which must happen on a daily basis. The following process is in order to manufacture the milk to any dairy which happens in a factory; First, after some processes, the milk turns into the products like cheese, cream, and butter, but the milk is packaged only if they are pasteurized; and selling the products in supermarkets and shops marks the final stage.

The figure illustrates the process of making You use this word too often, consider replacing it withdairy farm
dairy
You use this word too often, consider replacing it withcommodityprofitbrandworkamountcrop
products
 which includes workers and various producing lines with machines.

The initial impression from the graph is that all You use this word too often, consider replacing it withdairy farm
dairy
You use this word too often, consider replacing it withcommodityprofitbrandworkamountcrop
products
are made
 in the same factory and, the whole production from milking cows to being ready for selling in supermarkets; happens in less than 24 hours.

Three successive sentences begin with the same word. Consider rewording the sentence or use a thesaurus to find a synonym.
The
first
 step is that the cows are not ready for the milking stage unless they are grazed
 well; After milking cows by machines twice a day, the machines have transferred the You use this word too often, consider replacing it withcreambuttermilkhalf-and-half
milk
 to the refrigeration storage. Then, a You use this word too often, consider replacing it withcreambuttermilkhalf-and-half
milk
 tanker This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :approachesarrives
comes
 for delivering the You use this word too often, consider replacing it withcreambuttermilkhalf-and-half
milk
 to the You use this word too often, consider replacing it withdairy farm
dairy
 factory which This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :require
must
 happen on a daily basis.

The following process is in order to manufacture the You use this word too often, consider replacing it withcreambuttermilkhalf-and-half
milk
 to any You use this word too often, consider replacing it withdairy farm
dairy
 which happens in a factory; First
, after This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:a number of
some
 processes, the You use this word too often, consider replacing it withcreambuttermilkhalf-and-half
milk
 turns into the You use this word too often, consider replacing it withcommodityprofitbrandworkamountcrop
products
 like cheese, cream, and butter, This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:on the contrary
but
 the You use this word too often, consider replacing it withcreambuttermilkhalf-and-half
milk
is packaged
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :exclusively
only
 if they are pasteurized
; and selling the You use this word too often, consider replacing it withcommodityprofitbrandworkamountcrop
products
 in supermarkets and shops marks the final stage. 