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The diagrams show two traditional systems which can be used to collect water for irrigation purposes.

The diagrams show two traditional systems which can be used to collect water for irrigation purposes. 2xOb6
The diagrams show two traditional systems which can be used to collect water for irrigation purposes. The first method is swing basket, which can be used to collect ground water that is from one to two metres deep. It consists of the ropes that tie through a basket made of bamboo or leather. This system need two people who hold the ropes and collect water from the water ground. After that, they swing it over the next channels to let water flow to farmland. Another method is the rope and bucket that are pulled by a strong cow. Thanks to this animal, people can easily collect water from a 50-metre well. It consists of a basket linked to the rollers and pulley. Then, a cow with slope that be tied with these two rope, this animal will move, so water can be collected and go directly into the irrigation channels. Overall, the diagrams show how to collect water from the ground and deep well. Both systems are easily to build and operate. However, they used different types of energy and collect water from different places.
The diagrams
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two traditional systems which can be
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used
to
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collect
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water
for irrigation purposes.

The
first
method is swing basket, which can be
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used
to
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collect
ground
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water
that is
from one to two
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metres
deep. It consists of the
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ropes
that tie through a basket made of bamboo or leather. This system need two
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people
who hold the
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ropes
and
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collect
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water
from the
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water
ground. After that, they swing it over the
next
channels to
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let
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water
flow to farmland.

Another method is the
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rope
and bucket that
are pulled
by a strong cow. Thanks to this animal,
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people
can
easily
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collect
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water
from a
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50-metre
well. It consists of a basket linked to the rollers and pulley. Then, a cow with slope that
be tied
with these two
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rope
, this animal will
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move
,
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so
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water
can
be collected
and go
directly
into the irrigation channels.

Overall
, the diagrams
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show
how to
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collect
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water
from the ground and deep well. Both systems are
easily
to build and operate.
However
, they
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used
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different
types of energy and
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collect
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water
from
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different
places.

IELTS academic The diagrams show two traditional systems which can be used to collect water for irrigation purposes.

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6.0
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