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The diagrams show the percentage of population bases on ages of Yemen and Italy in 2000 and 2050.

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The diagrams show the percentage of population bases on ages of Yemen and Italy in 2000 and 2050. Overview, in Yemen, the proportion of children group (0-14 years old) will see a huge decrease, replaced by adult group (15-59 years old) while in Italy, the population will tend to age. Firstly, in Yemen, 0-14-years group and 15-59-years group will dramatically change. Youngest one will rise by 11% when the rest one will decline from a half of population to 37% (about over 1/4 total). The oldest age will not be different which will merely grow up by 2, 1%. On the other hand, this age in Italy will show a boom which started at 24, 1% in 2000 and climb to nearly double total after 50 years. By that time, the adult age will fall to 46, 2% that over four times the children one. In summary, population in two countries have numerous differences However, the 15-59 years group is always the biggest.
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of Yemen and Italy in 2000 and 2050.

Overview, in Yemen, the proportion of children
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(0-14 years
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) will
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a huge decrease, replaced by adult
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(15-59 years
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) while in Italy, the
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, in Yemen, 0-14-years
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and 15-59-years
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to 37% (about over 1/4 total). The oldest
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age
will not be
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which will
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On the other hand
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in Italy will
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a boom which
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started
at 24, 1% in 2000 and climb to
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double total after 50 years. By that time, the adult
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will fall to 46, 2% that over four times the children one.

In summary,
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in two countries have numerous differences
However
, the 15-59 years
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is always the biggest.
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