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The diagrams show the cement manufacturing process and then how it would be used to create concrete for constructing buildings.

The diagrams show the cement manufacturing process and then how it would be used to create concrete for constructing buildings. NJBg

The diagrams show the cement manufacturing process and then how it would be used to create concrete for constructing buildings. Overall, it can be clearly seen that cement is made in four stages before packing in bags. And also concrete is created by mixing four ingredients in the concrete mixer. It is noticeable that the cement process is divided into four stages. In the first stage, clay and limestone are crushed between two rollers to make soft powder. Then is blended in the mixer before passing into a rotating heater and burning. In the final stage, the burned product is ground by the grinder and afterwards, the ready product is packed. Regarding the remaining diagram, concrete is mostly made of gravel (small stones) with 50%. Gravel was mixed with 15% cement, 10% water and 25% sand which all were poured in the concrete mixer. And then all of the materials were constantly rotated to produce concrete.

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show
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cement
 manufacturing process and then how it would be This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :exploited
used
 to create concrete for constructing buildings.

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, it can be clearly
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seen
 that You use this word too often, consider replacing it withadhesiveplastermudsand
cement
is made
 in four You use this word too often, consider replacing it withstandinglegpointstepmomentphase
stages
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before
 packing in bags. And also
 concrete is created
 by mixing four ingredients in the concrete mixer.

It is noticeable that the You use this word too often, consider replacing it withadhesiveplastermudsand
cement
 process is divided
 into four You use this word too often, consider replacing it withstandinglegpointstepmomentphase
stages
. In the first
You use this word too often, consider replacing it withstandinglegpointstepmomentphase
stage
, clay and limestone are crushed
 between two rollers to This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :createconstructmanufactureproduce
make
 soft powder. Then is blended
 in the mixer This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:previouslyprior to
before
 passing into a rotating heater and burning. In the final You use this word too often, consider replacing it withstandinglegpointstepmomentphase
stage
, the burned product is ground
 by the grinder and afterwards, the ready product is packed
.

Regarding the remaining diagram, concrete is mostly
 made of gravel (This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:tiny
small
 stones) with 50%. Gravel was mixed
 with 15% You use this word too often, consider replacing it withadhesiveplastermudsand
cement
, 10% water and 25% sand which all were poured
 in the concrete mixer. And then Consider using "all the".all the
all of the
 materials were constantly
 rotated to produce concrete. 