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The diagrams show how a seaside town has changed since 1995.

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The diagrams show how a seaside town has changed since 1995. Overall, the town underwent a number of changes, the most important of which are the expansion of housing areas, the disappearance of the green area, and the development of amenities catering for recreational needs. The North-West of the town saw a number of changes, with the expansion of the accommodation area and the replacement of a sports center by a restaurant complex. The hotels in the middle of the map were upgraded into two-storey buildings, while the public park was replaced by holiday homes and a car park. A tennis court and a goal court were built, replacing the farmland in the North-Eastern part of the area. There used to be a fish market in the South-West of the town, but it has been redeveloped into an apartment complex, which was accompanied by the demolition of the pier where morning fish boats used to dock. To the East of the new apartment area, the coffee shop was moved eastwards, and a small road running parallel with the main road was constructed to allow access to this shop. Finally, the southern beach is open for tourists and locals to relax, with the availability of yachts.
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how a seaside
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since 1995.

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, the disappearance of the green
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area
, and the development of amenities catering for recreational needs.

The North-West of the
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, with the expansion of the accommodation
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and the replacement of a sports center by a restaurant complex. The hotels in the middle of the map
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two-storey
buildings, while the public park
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by holiday homes and a car park. A tennis court and a goal court
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, replacing the farmland in the North-Eastern part of the area.

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to be a fish market in the South-West of the
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,
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by the demolition of the pier where morning fish boats
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used
to dock. To the East of the new apartment
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, the coffee shop was
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eastwards, and a
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, the southern beach is open for tourists and locals to relax, with the availability of yachts.
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