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The diagrams show changes in a student common room.

The diagrams show changes in a student common room. mwQr
Two maps illustrate the innovation of an undergraduate common room from 5 years ago to the present. From a general perspective, these maps indicate several visible changes. These alternations of the student social room from 5 years ago to the present occur in the following features: the arrangement of tables and the number of benches. First, the emergence of the desk and eight chairs forced the table to be relocated in the west. In addition, the other table was displaced by the bench for laptops to the south. Moreover, the relocation of the television and three armchairs required the refrigerator to be removed in the southeast. On the other hand, the drink machine was put on the next television. The microwave was relocated to one bench in the north. Finally, other furniture such as the sink, cupboard, and bench in the room remained untouched.
Two maps illustrate the innovation of an undergraduate common room from 5 years ago to the present.

From a general perspective, these maps indicate several visible
changes
. These alternations of the student social room from 5 years ago to the present occur in the following features: the arrangement of tables and the number of benches.

First
, the emergence of the desk and eight chairs forced the table to
be relocated
in the west.
In addition
, the other table
was displaced
by the bench for laptops to the south.
Moreover
, the relocation of the television and three armchairs required the refrigerator to
be removed
in the southeast.

On the other hand
, the drink machine
was put
on the
next
television. The microwave
was relocated
to one bench in the north.
Finally
, other furniture such as the sink, cupboard, and bench in the room remained untouched.
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