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The diagrams illustrate the process of building an igloo

The diagrams illustrate the process of building an igloo LrwKp
The pictures show the different steps involved in constructing an igloo. Overall, there are 13 stages, from finding hard-packed snow to cutting ventilation holes in the wall and roof of the finished igloo. Using a snow saw, blocks are cut in hard-packed snow. Large blocks are used for the base. Next, the edges of the blocks are smoothed and placed to form a circle. Then, an entrance is made by digging a hole under the circular wall. The last opening on the top is filled by a large block, carefully cut to the exact size. After that, snow is thrown on the igloo and packed into all the crevices or gaps. Inside the igloo, the walls are smoothed by hand. Next, the entrance is built and the hole is covered with snow blocks.
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steps involved in constructing an igloo.

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, there are 13 stages, from finding
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snow
to cutting ventilation holes in the wall and roof of the finished igloo.

Using a
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are
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in
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-packed
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. Large
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blocks
are
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used
for the base.
Next
, the edges of the
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blocks
are smoothed
and placed to form a circle. Then, an entrance
is made
by digging a hole under the circular wall. The last opening on the top
is filled
by a large
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block
,
carefully
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cut
to the exact size.

After that,
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is thrown
on the igloo and packed into all the crevices or gaps. Inside the igloo, the walls
are smoothed
by hand.
Next
, the entrance
is built
and the hole
is covered
with
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IELTS academic The diagrams illustrate the process of building an igloo

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  American English
4 paragraphs
133 words
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Coherence and Cohesion: 7.0
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