Search
Tools
Listening
Reading
1. Academic
2. General
Writing
1. IELTSWriting Checker
2. IELTS Writing Samples
Speaking

Do you want to improve your writing? Try our new evaluation service and get detailed feedback.

The diagrams compare some changes of movie theater over a period of time from 1980 up to now

The diagrams compare some changes of movie theater over a period of time from 1980 up to now kxEKd

The diagrams compare some changes of movie theater over a period of time from 1980 up to now. Overall, it is clear that the cinema has changed considerably with the addition of three more cinema room and discarded of parking area. In 1980, the car park was situated in the north and opposite the entrance. However this parking-lot has been demolished now. One of the most noticeable of the cinema is cinema 2, which was largest spaces and located in the west. While cinema 1 was smaller than on the left hand of the entrance. Additionally, to the right of the entrance there had a place where people could purchase ticket and beverages. Looking at the moment day map, it is obvious that the parking area has been disappeared to supply more space for cinema 2 and 3. The toilet has been remain unchanged location in the eastern of the corner. Up to now the position of drinks is replaced by DVD shops. However this beverages store is moved to the left side and it serves food at present. In addition, the cinema 1 is replaced by foods/drinks and additional facilities particularly relax room and the cinema 1 is relocated next to the toilet.

The diagrams compare This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:a number of
some
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :altersadjusts
changes
 of movie theater over a period of time from 1980 up to This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :nowadays
now
. Overall
, it is This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :apparent
clear
 that the You use this word too often, consider replacing it withmovie theaterfilmmovie housedrive-in
cinema
 has This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :alteredadjusted
changed
considerably
 with the addition of three more You use this word too often, consider replacing it withmovie theaterfilmmovie housedrive-in
cinema
 room and discarded of parking area.

In 1980, the car park was situated
 in the north and opposite the entrance. Did you forget a comma after a conjunctive/linking adverb?However,
However
 this parking-lot has been demolished
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :nowadays
now
. One of the most noticeable of the You use this word too often, consider replacing it withmovie theaterfilmmovie housedrive-in
cinema
 is You use this word too often, consider replacing it withmovie theaterfilmmovie housedrive-in
cinema
 2, which was A determiner is probably missing here: "the largest".the largest
largest
 spaces and located in the west. “While” at the beginning of a sentence usually requires a 2nd clause. Maybe a comma, question or exclamation mark is missing, or the sentence is incomplete and should be joined with the following sentence.
While
You use this word too often, consider replacing it withmovie theaterfilmmovie housedrive-in
cinema
 1 was smaller than on the This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :departed
left
 hand of the entrance. Additionally
, to the right of the entrance there had a place where This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :individualsnationsociety
people
 could This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :acquire
purchase
 ticket and beverages.

Looking at the moment day map, it is obvious that the parking area has been disappeared
 to supply more space for You use this word too often, consider replacing it withmovie theaterfilmmovie housedrive-in
cinema
 2 and 3. The toilet has been Consider using a past participle here: "remained".remained
remain
 unchanged location in The phrase 'the eastern of' is not correct. Use a noun, not an adjective, between 'the' and 'of'.
the eastern of
 the corner. Up to This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :nowadays
now
 the position of drinks is replaced
 by DVD shops. Did you forget a comma after a conjunctive/linking adverb?However,
However
 this beverages store is This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :relocated
moved
 to the This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :departed
left
 side and it serves food at present. In addition
, the You use this word too often, consider replacing it withmovie theaterfilmmovie housedrive-in
cinema
 1 is replaced
 by foods/drinks and additional facilities particularly
 relax room and the You use this word too often, consider replacing it withmovie theaterfilmmovie housedrive-in
cinema
 1 is relocated
next
 to the toilet. 