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n the pie chart, the percentage of Over-Grazing was the highest while that of Other was the lowest. In Oceania, there was not the percentage of land degraded by Over-cultivation.

n the pie chart, the percentage of Over-Grazing was the highest while that of Other was the lowest. In Oceania, there was not the percentage of land degraded by Over-cultivation. AJQDx
The pie chart gives information the cause of agricultural land has low productivity while the table illustrates three regions of the world are affected by these cause in 1990 Overall, it can clearly be seen that in pie chart, the percentage of Over-Grazing was the highest while that of Other was the lowest. In Oceania, there did not have the percentage of land degraded by Over-cultivation. As can be seen from the pie chart, the percentage of Over-Grazing was the highest (35%), followed by the percentage of Deforestation (30%). The percentage of Over-Grazing (35%) was 28% more than the percentage of Other (7%). It is worth noticing that, In the table, there was a big gap between the percentage of land degraded by deforestation in Europe and North America (9, 8% and 0, 2%, respectively). In Europe, the percentage of land degraded by Over cultivation was the highest (7, 7%), followed by North America (3, 3%). In Oceania, the percentage of land degraded by over grazing achieved 11, 3%, which was 9, 8% as much as in North America. In Europe had the total percentage of land degraded was the highest (23%), followed by Oceania (13%).
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of Over-Grazing was the highest (35%), followed by the
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of Deforestation (30%). The
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of Over-Grazing (35%) was 28% more than the
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degraded by Over cultivation was the highest (7, 7%), followed by North America (3, 3%). In Oceania, the
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IELTS academic n the pie chart, the percentage of Over-Grazing was the highest while that of Other was the lowest. In Oceania, there was not the percentage of land degraded by Over-cultivation.

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