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The diagrams below show the stages in the cement-making process, and how cement is used to produce concept for building purposes.

The diagrams below show the stages in the cement-making process, and how cement is used to produce concept for building purposes. GMNEL

From the set of illustrations, the first picture offers details regarding the various stages and equipment used from the production of cement from the raw materials; whereas, the second diagram shows how concrete is made. Describing the cement production in detail, the process commences with the measured amount of limestone and clay being crushed in a crusher that results in powder. This powdered mixer is then passed through a rotating heater. Following this, the hot mixture is grounded to fine cement. Eventually, it is packaged and ready to be transported for on-site use. Focusing on the latter diagram, it can be inferred that concrete is made up of half gravel, quarter sand, 15% cement, and 10% water. All these are added together in a cylindrical drum and rotated until the concrete is yielded. The thoroughly mixed concrete is ready for immediate further use. Overall, it can be seen that cement production is a 5 stage process from mixing the ingredients to bagging cement; whereas, concrete making is simpler that involves mixing 4 ingredients in a concrete mixer.

From the set of illustrations, the first
 picture offers This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :particulars
details
 regarding the various stages and equipment This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :exploited
used
 from the production of You use this word too often, consider replacing it withadhesiveplastermudsand
cement
 from the raw materials; whereas, the second diagram This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :demonstratesportraysindicatesdisplays
shows
 how concrete is made
.

Describing the You use this word too often, consider replacing it withadhesiveplastermudsand
cement
 production in detail, the process commences with the measured amount of limestone and clay being crushed
 in a crusher that results in powder. This powdered mixer is then passed through a rotating heater. Following this, the hot mixture is grounded
 to fine You use this word too often, consider replacing it withadhesiveplastermudsand
cement
. Eventually
, it is packaged
 and ready to be transported
 for on-site This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :exploit
use
.

Focusing on the latter diagram, it can be inferred
 that concrete is made
 up of half gravel, quarter sand, 15% You use this word too often, consider replacing it withadhesiveplastermudsand
cement
, and 10% water. All these are This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :accrued
added
 together in a cylindrical drum and rotated until the concrete is yielded
. The thoroughly
 mixed concrete is ready for immediate further
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :exploit
use
.

Overall
, it can be This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :witnessed
seen
 that You use this word too often, consider replacing it withadhesiveplastermudsand
cement
 production is a 5 stage process from mixing the ingredients to bagging You use this word too often, consider replacing it withadhesiveplastermudsand
cement
; whereas, concrete making is simpler that involves mixing 4 ingredients in a concrete mixer. 

IELTS academic The diagrams below show the stages in the cement-making process, and how cement is used to produce concept for building purposes.

Academic

American English

4 paragraphs

177 words

6.0

Overall Band Score

Coherence and Cohesion: 7.0

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Lexical Resource: 6.0

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Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
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Grammatical Range: 6.5

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Check your writing for errors

Task Achievement: 7.0

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Support ideas with relevant, specific examples

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