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The diagrams below show the life cycle of the silk worm and the stages in the production of silk cloth.

The diagrams below show the life cycle of the silk worm and the stages in the production of silk cloth. 9nDr
The flow charts illustrate the development of a cocoon from an egg during its lifecycle and the production of cloth from silk. Overall, it is clear that there are four distinct stages illustrated in the process, commencing with producing eggs and ending with the development of a cocoon, and the production process starting with the selection of cocoon and ending with the production of thread. Moreover, the silkworm is a natural process and cyclic while thread making is a man-made and linear process, and cocoon and water are used to make a yarn. The first stage in the silkworm lifecycle is when the moth lays eggs. The next step after this is the emergence of the silkworm larva after 10 days. Over time, these larvae are consumed food from mulberry leaves. After four to six weeks, these larvae are rolled in silk thread. Eventually, the cocoon is produced after three to eight days. The final stage of the cycle is when the moth lays eggs at the interval of sixteen days. Turning to the production of cloth from silk, the cocoon which is produced already is selected and boiled in the water. Then it is given the shape of thread, ranging from 300 to 900m. In the subsequent stage, the thread is going through the procedure of dying. Finally, the yarn is weaved on the roller.
The flow charts illustrate the development of a
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cocoon
from an egg during its lifecycle and the
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production
of cloth from silk.

Overall
, it is
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clear
that there are four distinct
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stages
illustrated in the
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process
, commencing with producing eggs and ending with the development of a
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cocoon
, and the
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production
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process
starting with the selection of
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cocoon
and ending with the
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production
of
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thread
.
Moreover
, the silkworm is a natural
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process
and cyclic while
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thread
making is a
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man
-made and linear
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process
, and
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cocoon
and water are
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used
to
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make
a yarn.

The
first
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stage
in the silkworm lifecycle is when the moth lays eggs. The
next
step after this is the emergence of the silkworm larva after 10 days. Over time, these larvae
are consumed
food from mulberry
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leaves
. After four to six weeks, these larvae
are rolled
in silk
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thread
.
Eventually
, the
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cocoon
is produced
after three to eight days. The final
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stage
of the cycle is when the moth lays eggs at the interval of sixteen days.

Turning to the
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production
of cloth from silk, the
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cocoon
which
is produced
already
is selected
and boiled in the water. Then it is
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given
the shape of
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thread
, ranging from 300 to
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900m
. In the subsequent
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stage
, the
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thread
is going through the procedure of dying.
Finally
, the yarn is
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weaved
on the roller.

IELTS academic The diagrams below show the life cycle of the silk worm and the stages in the production of silk cloth.

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