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The diagrams below show the life-cycle of a species of large fish called the salmon. Summarise the information by selecting the reporting and the main feature, and make comparisons where relevant.

The diagrams illustrates one of the huge fish species' life cycle, called Salmon. Overall, there are 3 primary step in a transformation from fry to smolt and to adult salmon. Firstly, salmon eggs are placed in the upper river areas where the water current are moving relatively slow, more specifically, in the reeds with some tiny stones. They spend approximately half a year as eggs before the eggs develop to fry which look similar to small fishes, roughly 3 to 8 centimetre long. Secondly, the data shows that after turn in to fry, they move to the faster flowing water location, called lower river, and stay there for about 4 years before they grow and become larger creatures, smolt, which is about 12 to 15 centimetre in length. Finally they continue their journey to the open sea, another 5 years were spent and eventually smolt develop to an adult salmon which is a giant fish 70 to 76 long.
The diagrams
illustrates
one of the huge fish species' life cycle, called Salmon.
Overall
, there are 3 primary
step
in a transformation from fry to
smolt
and to adult salmon.

Firstly
, salmon eggs
are placed
in the upper river areas where the water
current
are moving
relatively
slow, more
specifically
, in the reeds with
some
tiny stones. They spend approximately half a year as eggs
before
the eggs develop to fry which look similar to
small
fishes, roughly 3 to 8
centimetre
long.

Secondly
, the data
shows
that after turn in to fry, they
move
to the faster flowing water location, called lower river, and stay there for about 4 years
before
they grow and become larger creatures,
smolt
, which is about 12 to 15
centimetre
in length.
Finally
they continue their journey to the open sea, another 5 years
were spent
and
eventually
smolt
develop to an adult salmon which is a giant fish 70 to 76 long.
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IELTS academic The diagrams below show the life-cycle of a species of large fish called the salmon.

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  American English
3 paragraphs
159 words
6.0
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 7.0
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